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初中生英语作文:春花  发帖心情 Post By:2009/9/8 18:25:44 [只看该作者]

 It was a Sunday afternoon. I went out for a walk after I finished my homework.
  What a lovely day!The sun was shining bright in the sky. The trees had turned green. Many flowers had come out. Oh!Spring had come here again.
  I was walking along the street when I saw an old woman and a little girl standing not far from me. There was a big basket on the ground. It seemed that the old woman was asking the way. I went nearer to them and heard the girl telling the old woman how to get to her son's home. I went past them and went on my way. Suddenly I heard the girl calling the old woman. I turned round and saw the woman was walking heavily with the big basket1 and the girl was running after her. The girl ran up to the old woman, took the basket from her2 and said, "Old granny, let me go with you to your son's home."
  I watched them until they disappeared in the distance.
  What a good girl!She was just like a beautiful flower in spring.
  
  星期天下午,我做完作业到外边散步。
  多么好的天气啊!灿烂的阳光照耀着大地,树木变绿了,许多花儿都开放了。噢!春天又来了。
  我沿街正往前走时,看见离我不远的地方站着一位老奶奶和一个小姑娘。地上有一个大竹篮,似乎老奶奶正在问路。我走近了她们,听到那个女孩正在告诉老奶奶往她儿子家去的路。我从她们跟前走过,继续向前走去。突然我听到那个女孩在喊那位老奶奶,我转身看见了那位老奶奶挎着大篮子艰难地走着,而小姑娘在她后面追着。这个小女孩跑到老奶奶跟前,接过篮子说:“老奶奶,让我送你到你儿子家去吧。”
  我看着她们的身影消失在远方。
  多么好的姑娘啊!她多像春天里的一枝美丽的鲜花。
  
  精彩点拨
  本文作者用对比的手法写了一个女孩帮助老奶奶的事。为了突出小女孩乐于助人的高尚品质,作者没有写小女孩如何如何,而是通过“我”与小女孩的对比,突出小女孩热心助人的美好心灵。本文写得有条理,语句较通顺,遣词造句也较正确。全文大都用过去时写成。文章使用较好的词语和句型有:fora walk,in the sky,see/hear sb.doing sth.,get to,go past,go on,turned round,run up to等。此外,还用了由when,until等引导的从句,值得读者学习。
  注意两点:①…saw the woman was walking...应改为“...saw the old woman walking...”才正确。
   ②“...took the basket from her...”应改成:“...taking the basket from her...”才符合英语句法原则。

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